Ashley's 1st critique

Having a conversation at an inconvenient time Ashley, I liked the way in which you gave your reader a vivid image of an awkward time with someone. I like the “realness” of the story—the “awkward interactions” between the two characters is something that is not uncommon. I like the portions of the story where the main character makes note of things in her thoughts, but I would have liked to see more of them. Once the main characters get to their destination, the portions of note making/taking is gone—I would have like to see how the main character would have describe some of the people at the party or maybe some of her surroundings. I don’t think that the title fits the story because the story seems to not be about having a conversation at an inconvenient time—unless that refers to the first conversation, but the rest of the story seems to be about an awkward moment with a person—because there isn’t much conversation in the story to begin with.