Alex "In Fair Asphodel"

In Fair Asphodel Alex, I won’t lie, when I started reading this piece I was so confused that I stopped reading chronologically and just started bouncing around from one section to another—in no specific order. I liked that I could read your piece out of order and the meaning doesn’t change. But that may also be a down fall because it was hard—even when reading it in order—to understand what is actually going on in the story. I’m confused if, in certain sections, the girl is alive and you’re talking about her past, or if the king is admiring her dead body, also, are the horses on the carousel actually coming to life—that would be experimental. I think that a lot more could happen with this piece because you leave the meat of the story so open for the reader—like we don’t even know how the dead girl died—so because of the ambiguity you could take this story anywhere.