Critique on "Lost"

Lost Gabrielle, I like how you experimented with the idea of a ‘lost’ ad/sign. I like that in the beginning , as I was reading, I thought that it was a lost dog or some type of pet. As I continued I realized that it was a lost ‘friend’. Some of the hints that strayed my mind away from thinking that it was a dog were the eye color, height, and the “markings”. The length of the piece is also a giveaway, but I like the way in which you incorporated a story about the lost friend in this ad. I also like how you play on male and male friendships. I think that is you sectioned off the rest of the piece—for example: “Hobbies”, “Personality”, “Clothing”, etc.—it would flow a bit better and it would continue throughout the story as a lost ad. I also think if you added a picture of some sort it would add to the piece.