"Blue" Tre'

Blue Tre’, I really like how you played with an old fairy-tale story and made it your own—experimental. I think that the way you switch the gender from female to male, making all of the characters male changes the outcome of the story. A couple of things that I wanted to comment on would be the mother, I assumed she passed away, but I think if you give your reader more information on the mother that would help the story more. I also think that the way in which the shark and the boy blue “battle” could be more aggressive—since the story is more masculine. I think that the shark’s part in the story could have been elongated or further explained. I also think that the ending could have given more clarity as why the step-father wanted the grandfather’s land.