"Cynthia" Ashley

Cynthia Ashley, I like how you experimented with the typography, but my only critique would be to give the reader more of both characters. The way in which the narrator builds up the story for the reader seems as though it is in Cynthia’s favor. The only things that the narrator is giving the reader about Jill is that she has thin lips and that she eats a lot of Cool Ranch Doritos. Although I thought Cynthia was crazy for not defending herself and for letting Jill use her car after she’s been so rude to her, I think that you could’ve made Cynthia a bit more crazy so that killing Jill would seem more real. I think that the narrator as well as Cynthia and Jill, did not give the reader enough evidence as to why Jill needed to die—it seems if she just moved then things wouldn’t have gotten there.