David 's 1st Critique

Letter From the Front David, When I began to read the story, I thought that I was reading about real war, but as I continued to read, I realized that it was a fictional war on water. I think that is the best part about this experimental fiction—the whole mood of the story is a somewhat satire. I like the way that the narrator explains to the reader how the war came about and how far its gotten through a letter, but I think it would have been better if it were longer—maybe a journal entry, or a series of letters or journal entries—because I wanted to know more about the water wars. You illustrated an image in my head of these water wars so vividly and then you end with the focus more so on Penelope (asking her questions and stuff), and then the story ends. I would like to see more of the water wars, it was just really funny. Alicia H.