Critique on "Graffiti"

Graffiti Gabrielle, I like the experimental concept of using graffiti as your topic and your topography. I like how some of the graffiti’d section titles were found in the prose of that section, but I think if keep that pattern consistence it would flow better. I think that instead of the font change on each section title, there could have been actual pictures of graffiti art and/or more information as to who’s speaking and why they’re passionate about graffiti. Some of the title’s that you have for the sections—like “Mad Skillz” for example—used ‘slang’, however the prose in those sections do not. I think if the voice in the prose is supposed to support or speak for the title, then it too would be written in ‘slang’. I think that you could do a lot more with this piece.